求英语达人帮忙写一段话

Hello everyone. My name is XXX and I'm XX years old. I like to play computer, read books, and listen to music in my free time. I've also always been interested in travelling since my childhood. For me, I think to visit a different country is a very excited thing. It is a real piece of joy. Especially for an English-spoken country like Singapore, it totally will help me to improve my English. I've done a lot of research online and found out Singapore is a very beautiful country. The famous Sentosa beach, the delicious local food, the fresh air....everything! Everything is calling me to make a visit. It really is a great chance for me to learn more about the world and expand my horizon. Thank you very much.

全部都是自己写的。。按照初中水平来写的
你看看行不行。。如果哪儿不满意我可以再改改

Hi everyone. I'm a high school student and my school has organised a trip to Singapore. I would like to grab this very opportunity to open my eyesight on this beautiful country well-known for its cleanness and tropical living. As Singapore is a multi-cultural as well as an English-speaking country, this is a great opportunity for me to learn more about Caucasians and also to learn more about the other cultures in Singapore.

I've heard that the local food and scenery are splendid and I would really love to try them out. I would really be grateful if I get this chance that I know would definitely be helpful.

我在新加坡住过，如果楼主你真的要去新加坡的话，可以上百度HI找我
我会跟你讲解一下那里的大概情况和需要带的东西。(*^__^*)

my name is Zhang Tongwen.I'm a middle school student.I'm in Grade 1.I am 14.years old , I like always play computer games and footaball.Would you like to be my friends? Thank you very much

Can you believe this? There is an opportunity in our school right now that you can try out a different kind of life. We are going to Xingapore for XXX days! For me ,XXX, this is the best time ever. You would get to see so many fasinating things, try tons of delious food and buy lots of cool stuff there. And plus, it's one of the best time to improve your English. Let me give you an example first, for all the girls, do you ever want to go to a shopping mall that looks like a castle with the most fashionable clothes and cutest decorations ever hanging around you? If yes, THEN COME TO XINGAPORE AND LET'S HAVE A MEMORABLE VACATION TOGETHER!!!
P.S. Any questions, come see me! XXX
如果楼主真的来新加坡的话，本人希望你可以去易安城逛一逛，真的很棒！