英语短文改错 高分！

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My interest 【with】in computers began with video games I used to play at a local shopping mall. My parents disliked these games, and perhaps this dislike explains why they refuse to take computers seriously. Personal computers that operate as word processors and do other jobs 【look】looked to them like mechanical games. Same 【do】 as the pocket calculators my friends and I 【use】 used to do math.
A word processor I used in my senior year to write papers 【for】in English may explain this suspicion. A word processor is a small computer program 【to work】 that works like a typewriter. The keyboard is similar to a typewriter. The major difference is that in a processor “function keys” do many more jobs. Specifically, the typed words appear on the “monitor” or screen above the keyboard, and since you “edit” these words on the screen, the processor has extra keys that erase words or whole lines or move 【it】 them to other places in the paragraph or essay. 【The other】Another convenience is that corrected pages don’t have to be retyped. The processor has an attached printer and （with a） press （of） a button （it） transfers the text on the screen to “hard copy” – （a）computer jargon for typed copy produced by the printer.
Processors thus make the job of writing look easy. One of my teachers objected that a paper I wrote on a processor looked 【as if】like a bank statement; he was objecting to the broken letters that a cheap “dot-matrix” printer like mine 【produces】had produced. He didn’t want to tell me his real objection – that writing a paper should not be easy. He obviously assumed that the processor and printer （had）made the writing easy by doing the work. But the printer doesn’t write the paper, it just reproduces what I 【write】have written with the processor. The real work is in writing the paper and editing the words on the screen. In fact, the ease of making corrections with a processor 【give】gives me greater control over my writing. I didn’t use to 【proofread】proofreading a paper to avoid having to edit a page or retype it. The processor encourages me to look for mistakes.

楼上有人抄我的 可惜第三个我改答案了bravo

文章语言很生硬 思路很混乱
很多地方有争议
老外没这么写的

第一段explains-------explained
refuse-------refused
same (do）------is

第二段papers (for) english------in
erase words or whole lines or move (it)------them
The processor has an attached printer and (press) a button (transfers) the text on -------presses to transfer
第三段 looked as (if) a bank statement-------去掉if
like (mine) produces-------my
with a processor （give）-------gives
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My interest 1.[with] in computers began with video games I used to play 2.[at] in a local shopping mall. My parents disliked these games, and perhaps this dislike explains why they 3.[refuse] refused to take computers seriously. Personal computers that operate as word processors and do other jobs 4.[look]删掉 to them like mechanical games. 5.[The] 增加 Same do the pocket calculators my friends and I use to do math.
A word processor I used in my senior year to write papers for English may explain this suspicion. A word processor is a small computer program to work like a typewriter. The keyboard is similar to a typewriter. The major difference is that in a processor “function keys” do 6.[many] much more jobs. Specifically, the typed words appear on the “monitor” or screen above the keyboard, and since you “edit” these words on the screen, the processor has extra keys that erase words or whole lines or move it to other places in the paragraph or essay. The other convenience is that corrected pages don’t have to be retyped. The processor has an attached printer and 7.[press]删掉 a button transfers the text on the screen to “hard copy” – computer jargon for typed copy produced by the printer.
Processors thus make the job of writing look easy. One of my teachers 8.[is] 增加 objected that a paper I wrote on a processor looked as if a bank statement; he was 9.[objecting] objected to the broken letters that a cheap “dot-matrix” printer like mine produces. He didn’t want to tell me his real objection – that writing a paper should not be easy. He obviously assumed that the processor and printer made the writing easy by doing the work. But the printer doesn’t write the paper, it just reproduces what I write with the processor. The real work is in writing the paper and editing the words on the screen. In fact, the ease of making corrections with a processor 10.[give] gives me greater control over my writing. I didn’t use to proofread a paper to avoid having to edit a page or retype it. The processor encourages me to look for mistakes.

Think of a famous person.lmangine what his or her lifestyle is like.write about him or her.try to use some of the worlds in the box.

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My interest with（in） computers began with video games I used to play at a local shopping mall. My parents disliked these games, and perhaps this dislike explains why they refuse（refused） to take computers seriously. Personal computers that operate(operated) as word processors and do other jobs look to them like mechanical games. Same(加上to) do the pocket calculators my friends and I use to do math.

A word processor I used in my senior year to write papers for English may explain this suspicion. A word processor is a small computer program to work（working） like a typewriter. The keyboard is similar to a typewriter. The major difference is that in a processor “function keys” do many(该词多余，删除) more jobs. Specifically, the typed words appear on the “monitor” or screen above the keyboard, and since（then) you “edit” these words on the screen, the processor has extra keys that erase words or whole lines or move it to other places in the paragraph or essay. The other convenience is that corrected pages don’t have to be retyped. The processor has an attached printer and press a button transfers the text on the screen to “hard copy” – computer jargon for typed copy produced by the printer.
Processors thus make the job of writing look(looked) easy. One of my teachers objected that a paper I wrote on a processor looked as if a bank statement; he was objecting to the broken letters that a cheap “dot-matrix” printer like mine produces. He didn’t want to tell me his real objection – that writing a paper should(would) not be easy. He obviously assumed that the processor and printer made the writing easy by doing the work. But the printer doesn’t write the paper, it just reproduces what I write with the processor. The real work is in writing the paper and editing the words on the screen. In fact, the ease of making corrections with a processor give(gives) me greater control over my writing. I didn’t use to proofread a paper to avoid having to edit a page or retype it. The processor encourages me to look for mistakes.