初一英语~大家来找茬。。。

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He works in ..... Work in是短语配合的意思。
所以动词形态不对。。应该是 he working in the....

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he is friendly to everyone....语法上没有问题，但是没有这么用的。。。别扭。..

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she works in a school....同上

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they all work hard..。。用法不正确。。。。建议改称hard of work

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i want to be ......want to是口语“应该“的意思。。。改为i want be a......

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i hope i can speak english very well。。。 语法没什么问题，但是没有这么说的，太麻烦了。。。。简化一点。。。。

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what are you going to be in the future....语法没有问题，但是还是很罗索的句子。。。很多词可以删除掉。。。。what(who) you want be in the future.

There are three people in my family.They are my father,my mother and I.My father is an engineer.He works in a big factory .He is friendly to everyone.My mother is a teacher.She teaches art.She works in a school.She is good at painting.They all work hard.When I grow up,I want to be a translator.Because I like English.I hope I can speak English very well.What about you?What are you going to be in the future?

一处错误，已改正 : )

There are three people in my family.They are my father,my mother and I.My father is an engineer.He works in a big factory .He is friendly to everyone.My mother is a teacher.She teaches art.She works in a school.She is good at painting.They all work hard.When I grow up,I want to be a translator.Because I like English.I hope I can speak English very well.What about you?What are you going to be in the future?

My father,my mother and I.改为My father,my mother and me.