帮我批改一下英语作文

I feel so honored to win the English competition that I can’t help sharing my experience in learning English.
Actually, there are a number of ways for us to improve our English. As far as I’m concerned, I wonder that it is essential for us to keep doing the following three points. To begin with, it’s beneficial to take part in the English Center because we can improve our English while feeling relaxed. In addition, keeping diary helps us to remember more words. The more words we learn, the easier we speak. What’s more, skimming English Websites is a good way to learn English. As a result, we can create a good language and learn a great deal of new words.
Taking into account of all factors, we may reach the conclusion that if we can keep the previous ways, our English will be better soon,
总体来说，你写的作文还是很不错的。有几个地方不是很理解，所以按自己的理解改了一下。BECAUSE必须有逗号存在，作为一个句子的一部分。组合句式的话就是考语法或者是语感。多读读书就会有感觉了。