明天面试，准备了一段自我介绍，大家帮我看看！

Hello, I am Jenny. I come from XX, its bueatiful city near the Shanghai.
I loved small animals , I kept 17 cats with my younger sister.
I'd like to traveling. In this summer holiday, I am going to Guangzhou, Jinlin, and Beijing.My Cantonese improved better when I was in Guangzhou. I arranged a voluntary work and I recerived a lot from this.
I perfer the books about history. I am an expert of play in Chinses traditional instruments-Zheng. On the weekends, I usually go to swimming and skating with friends. I have got special training about these. Some friends learned form me. I am so pleasant about it.
英文麻！不需要把它复杂化越简单越好，但一定要让外国人看懂，听懂就行。
下面两句话我实在看出你要说什么意思，我也就没有改了
I arranged a voluntary work and I recerived a lot from this.
I perfer the books about history.

需要突出什么主题嘛？
总体感觉比较平淡咯。而且这句
This summer holiday, I spent one month in Guangzhou, Jinlin, and Beijing separately
我觉得吧时间放句末符合习惯些

错点:
你好，我是某某，你可以叫詹妮。我来自某某，优美的城市上海附近。
我爱小动物，我把17只猫与妹妹。

什么是我把17只猫与妹妹啊,这句不通啊!~~~~

最后一句写错了吧？plansant?应该是pleasant!
I am pleased with it!(be pleased with sth.)或者直接说I am so pleasant!