初三英语作文。pocket money 大家帮帮忙，很重要的！急用！

Pocket money
Every year,we can have our own pocket money.I think every children is very happy.Now,let me tell you something about it.
Every day ,parents can give us some pocket money,we can use it on anyone.Such as buy notebooks,rulers,rubbers,penicls,pens and so on.And some children will buy some food and others.If the children have a lot of pocket money.They will very happy and have a great day out!
But some of the children in poor areas have no pocket money.Because they are very poor in the poor areas .SO we need to help them.We help them in many wanys.Like we can rise some money for them.
What do you think of my idea?

以上这篇还不赖 有一些小小的语法错误 我给更正一下啊

Pocket money
Every year,we can have our own pocket money.I think every child is very happy.Now,let me tell you something about it.
Every day ,parents can give us some pocket money,we can use it for something。Such as buying notebooks,rulers,rubbers,penicls,pens and so on.And some children will buy some food and others.If children have a lot of pocket money.They will be very happy and have a great day ！
But some of children in poor areas have no pocket money.Because they are very poor in the poor areas .SO we need to help them.We help them in many wanys.Like we can raise some money for them.
What do you think of my idea?