(英语高手看过来,帮我修改一份英文的自我介绍)的修改后文章

修改后，只是语法等方面.不过你如果真的是商务英语专业的话，你就不要看我的了。我只是按照自己的思路改了一下，把你那些明显的中国式英语改了一下。
6 months ago I graduated and joined the Shanghai ** Furniture Company, Ltd, became a member of the society. My first job was a trading assistant, I knew there was much knowledge that I needed to learn . The knowledge which I learnt from books was very limited, so I wanted to learn more from works to increase my social experiences.

At that time, my main work was taking charge of part of the correspondence works in company, translated product introductions into Chinese,and contacted with our supplier and so on. Usually I picked customers up who came from other countries ,and arranged the hotel .During that time , I was responsible to check out products information taht customers required , such as something that needed to be improved, somthing that unqualified, etc. And then, I had to tell our workers these information ,to make some improve and make customers satisfied.
Because my major is Business English in college , I hope to find a job relatived to my profession, so I could master the professional knowledge as quickly as possible, then make them into practice. In the trading field, good chances are everywhere, but only a prepared man can catch it. However, I think profession is not the only standard for my job-hunting.

Through your company's web site, I know your company is a big sock business company basically, and goning to take more share in the market. I want to get into a company like yours to practice myself better, and make more profits for the company. Although I didn’t have more profession knowledge in cotton traed field(纺织业,不知对不对?), but I believe “everything is possible”. As an excellent graduated student, I think my advantage is that I have strong ability of consistently learning new things. No matter what I do, I have good ability to accept new business and master it in a short time. That’s the reason why I choose your company.
Shanghai, as a fashionable, modern, metropolitan city of China, is located with millions of Multinational company, overseas-funded enterprises, which will need a lot of persons who have comprehensive knowledge, so I’m learning Japanese and computer skills in my spare time.

I was so prepared that I could catch the chance when it is coming . If you choose me, I won not let you down