一篇很短的英语自我介绍，请大家帮我纠正一下语法错误、谢谢！！

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第二行： of改成in, china的首字母大写。
第三行：sophomore就是大二学生的意思了，不用再加 student。按照英文的语言习惯，是从学院到学校的，所以 是 Jinjiang College in SiChuan University.
第四行最后，knowledge是不可数名词，不可用many修饰.
第五行的后半句，奖学金前面可以不用school修饰了，感觉十分的中国英语...
第八行前半句...不是很地道，"一些新的东西总能引起我的关注"--改成 I could be always attracted by something fresh(new或者novel)。如何？
第11行：a famous city for romance and art, 浪漫和艺术之都，for后面应该是名词形式；后半句 是要表达“就像其他设计师一样”应该是这样表达---just like other designers.
12行：if i have the opportunity。。。 ;后半句 “设计能力”你不会查了有道吧，不错哈哈。
最后一句：时间很紧迫....time is pressing. wish 前要有主语，这里又是中文思维在英语表达中的体现了。。“留下很好的印象”直接 impress you就可以了。

总体来说，语句有些零碎，结构单一，都是主动句，这样说出来给人感觉比较琐碎。祝好运^_^

Good afternoon， ladies and gentlemen~！

It is really my honor to have this opportunity for this interview. I will introduce myself briefly. I am 20 years old,born in Sichuan province , which is a beautiful place in china, and i am still a sophomore at Sichuan University Jinjiang College. My major is Environmental Art. I spent most of my time studying and have acquired most of the knowledge of my major during school time, and the scholarships returned My efforts。

I think i am a Creative guy since Kindergarten,and had published an idea in Magazine. I always believe I could be a good designer。

Always, I'm attracted by something fresh, like new environment ,new product. Maybe I'll meet some problems in the near future, but nothing is impossible only if we keep on learning~!

France is a Famous country for its romantic and artistic culture. As other designers, France is also attractive to me. If I had the opportunity to be there, I think my design capability will be greatly improved.

Thank you for your attention!